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Lisa Joy 🏳️‍🌈's avatar

I love the way you write dialogue (and can kind of see where/why you would critique my loquaciousness).

In the economy of your words in this piece, you convey practical emergency reactions, evaluating the patient and making quick work of prioritizing his needs quickly. I hope he is as honest and earnest as he is portrayed. The job and land itself are dangerous enough. The first boy I dated as a teen has a traumatic brain injury and other permanent issues from having a tree go wrong while he was felling it (he was a pro). Back in the time this is set, when there wasn’t life flight and trauma centers, injuries were a lot more grave.

We have been doing something a lot less organized at the Porch (so called because in good weather it starts on my porch swing). I can’t wait to see what you’re building.

Shahrazad Nour's avatar

Dear Jay,

The scene that stays with me isn't the rescue. It's the splitting of that last log. Rusk never agrees with Jack. Not once. "I still think you spent too much." "I know." That's the entire resolution, and it's enough, because nothing in this story asks disagreement to end before people can stand next to each other again.

That's a different mechanism than most stories about community use. Usually belonging gets secured by consensus, or by one person conceding they were wrong. Here it's secured by two people carrying opposite convictions into the same swing of the ax.

Amos runs the same logic in reverse. Nobody asks him to prove anything before the blanket, the stew, the chair by the stove. So when he finally offers, "what can I do," it isn't obligation talking. It's something that was allowed to arrive on its own time, which is the only way an offer means anything at all.

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